Her Sentence
She saw her long, thin arms waving to keep the blackbirds off--the fight had begun.
She saw her long, thin arms waving to keep the blackbirds off--the fight had begun.
The author uses dashes to show what is happening with the girl as she is waving the blackbirds away.
My Sentence
Jess saw his tiny, young sister gasping to keep the air in--the attack had begun.
My Sentence
Jess saw his tiny, young sister gasping to keep the air in--the attack had begun.
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